Removed some unnecessary parentheses around entire sentences and completely relevant clauses. Also expanded the Using PGP with Email section to provide more detail.
Also made newlines at the end of sentences as per the doc guidelines.
A few content changes, read over them to see if you like them:
* A few sentences were reworded so that end users could understand them better, without sacrificing detail.
* Sometimes more detail was added to give context to sentences or to make them more accurate.
* New sentences were added to help transitions in thought.
* New sentences were added to provide reasoning to earlier instructions so that the reader knew why they were important.
None of these content changes were particularly extensive or clashed with the original paper but they do change the meaning a bit, so I thought it important to document them.
Other changes:
* Subject-verb agreement
* Corrected some parentheses placements
* Misc. Grammar Fixes
* Inserted forgotten commas and periods
* Word variation
* Rework on some sentences that had really roundabout ways of saying things
In addition to my PR being a big edit, it is also on an important document. I have looked over my changes well and I know you will too. Reply if anything needs fixing/changing in the PR.
I have more changes that I want to add, but I figured I had edited the document enough already and if I added anythign else or made more extensive modifications it might be hard to tell what exactly I did.
I know this feels like a workaround for some misbehaving/missing UI, but it is better than the reference to the ML discussion, and it links to the open issue.
I have not done extensive testing to this method. I am sending the PR in a hurry because I have been frustrated (missing my compose-key) for some days after reinstalling, and I think this may prove useful for other users. Please try to reproduce and/or get some community feedback before accepting the PR; Also, feel free to reword, reformat, or discard :)
This proposed file changes probably includes some content changes, but ones I hope you'll immediately agree with because the result is a more accurate article.
Among other things,
* Removed unnecessarily prudent logical connection phrases like "thus," and just replaced them with "because" and "as a result" where I could.
* Moved some sentences or clarifications to their proper sections, e.g. moved the "Despite this rule, some acronyms..." line to the Avoid Acronyms section.
* Removed some sentences (like "Additionally, security focused software has the responsibility of providing safety to the user and their data") that, while true, without proper context did not seem relevant to the article.
* Removed some phrases that repeated known contextual information like "of usability and experience" in "if you are interested in furthering your understanding of usability and experience" or "which are shown to a user" in "notifications which are shown to a user".
* Introduced some clauses or phrases that clarified information, like adding "of those mentioned" to "All three desktop environments have their own human interface guidelines,"
* Merged the Avoid Repetitive Tasks and Minimize Repetitive Steps sections.
* Rewrote some sentences that were incomplete or didn't make sense into what I assumed the writer intended to say.
* Inserted possessive's' when they were necessary, and turned bigger sentences into smaller ones using possessives when I could ("notification messages presented to user" --> "user's notification messages")
* Grammar edits
* Compartmentalized run-on sentences.
This was a pretty big edit, so you'll probably disagree with some of the changes. Just explain what you want to be re-done or where my edits changes an important meaning/formed an inaccuracy and I will make another commit.
Current link is gone (redirect to nowhere useful), the archive.org copy
is missing the figures, and dl.acm.org is not Tor-friendly.
This is the best copy there seems to be.
I did not modify any of the content itself; just presented it more clearly by:
- Modifying unnecessarily wordy phrases
- Fixing grammatical mistakes
- Partitioning run-on sentences
- Reduced Word Re-use
- Removed unnecessary commas
- Formatted each individual typographic convention consistently
- Made misc. changes to improve clarity and make the text more evocative
I did not modify any of the content itself; just presented it more clearly by:
- Modifying unnecessarily wordy phrases
- Fixing grammatical mistakes
- Partitioning run-on sentences
- Reduced Word Re-use
- Made misc. changes to improve clarity and make the text more evocative
* Changed the package list to a proper list, dropped the "-vm" suffix,
and added the links to their respective repositories.
* Replaced a link to a qubes-os.org repository with the new Github
repository
* Updated a reference to "xen-vm" to "vmm-xen" and removed the outdated
link to the Arch AUR.
* Updated the suggested xenstore-read command to one that currently works
