Fixed problems related to:
* Unnecessary wordiness
* Subject-Verb Agreement
* Typos
* Not creating newline at end of sentence as per documentation guidelines.
* Putting sentences where they logically needed to be
* Adding articles where necessary
* Added descriptions of links that just used the URL as the display text
I don't understand some of the information here, so tell me if any of the fixes I made inadvertently created inaccuracies.
This proposed file changes probably includes some content changes, but ones I hope you'll immediately agree with because the result is a more accurate article.
Among other things,
* Removed unnecessarily prudent logical connection phrases like "thus," and just replaced them with "because" and "as a result" where I could.
* Moved some sentences or clarifications to their proper sections, e.g. moved the "Despite this rule, some acronyms..." line to the Avoid Acronyms section.
* Removed some sentences (like "Additionally, security focused software has the responsibility of providing safety to the user and their data") that, while true, without proper context did not seem relevant to the article.
* Removed some phrases that repeated known contextual information like "of usability and experience" in "if you are interested in furthering your understanding of usability and experience" or "which are shown to a user" in "notifications which are shown to a user".
* Introduced some clauses or phrases that clarified information, like adding "of those mentioned" to "All three desktop environments have their own human interface guidelines,"
* Merged the Avoid Repetitive Tasks and Minimize Repetitive Steps sections.
* Rewrote some sentences that were incomplete or didn't make sense into what I assumed the writer intended to say.
* Inserted possessive's' when they were necessary, and turned bigger sentences into smaller ones using possessives when I could ("notification messages presented to user" --> "user's notification messages")
* Grammar edits
* Compartmentalized run-on sentences.
This was a pretty big edit, so you'll probably disagree with some of the changes. Just explain what you want to be re-done or where my edits changes an important meaning/formed an inaccuracy and I will make another commit.
Current link is gone (redirect to nowhere useful), the archive.org copy
is missing the figures, and dl.acm.org is not Tor-friendly.
This is the best copy there seems to be.
I did not modify any of the content itself; just presented it more clearly by:
- Modifying unnecessarily wordy phrases
- Fixing grammatical mistakes
- Partitioning run-on sentences
- Reduced Word Re-use
- Removed unnecessary commas
- Formatted each individual typographic convention consistently
- Made misc. changes to improve clarity and make the text more evocative
I did not modify any of the content itself; just presented it more clearly by:
- Modifying unnecessarily wordy phrases
- Fixing grammatical mistakes
- Partitioning run-on sentences
- Reduced Word Re-use
- Made misc. changes to improve clarity and make the text more evocative
* Changed the package list to a proper list, dropped the "-vm" suffix,
and added the links to their respective repositories.
* Replaced a link to a qubes-os.org repository with the new Github
repository
* Updated a reference to "xen-vm" to "vmm-xen" and removed the outdated
link to the Arch AUR.
* Updated the suggested xenstore-read command to one that currently works
