Wrote a paragraph or two about verifying the QubesOS ISO signature and wrote a disclaimer that Qubes does not automatically verify external downloads not coming from its own repositories.
Fixed problems related to:
* Unnecessary wordiness
* Subject-Verb Agreement
* Typos
* Not creating newline at end of sentence as per documentation guidelines.
* Putting sentences where they logically needed to be
* Adding articles where necessary
* Added descriptions of links that just used the URL as the display text
I don't understand some of the information here, so tell me if any of the fixes I made inadvertently created inaccuracies.
Updated the wikipedia definition to reflect what's on the page (which is a more accurate definition anyways). It's a little heavy, but since the sentence has quotation marks we should be basing it on a direct quote from the article and not a paraphrase. If you want to paraphrase it because it's dense someone else can come and remove those quotation marks and write their own defintion.
While I did not modify the source, I also want to ask that we not source information from the wikipedia article itself, but rather the sources that it references in its footnotes.
Also:
* Missing a lette
* Removed unnecessary word glyphs
Removed some unnecessary parentheses around entire sentences and completely relevant clauses. Also expanded the Using PGP with Email section to provide more detail.
Also made newlines at the end of sentences as per the doc guidelines.
A few content changes, read over them to see if you like them:
* A few sentences were reworded so that end users could understand them better, without sacrificing detail.
* Sometimes more detail was added to give context to sentences or to make them more accurate.
* New sentences were added to help transitions in thought.
* New sentences were added to provide reasoning to earlier instructions so that the reader knew why they were important.
None of these content changes were particularly extensive or clashed with the original paper but they do change the meaning a bit, so I thought it important to document them.
Other changes:
* Subject-verb agreement
* Corrected some parentheses placements
* Misc. Grammar Fixes
* Inserted forgotten commas and periods
* Word variation
* Rework on some sentences that had really roundabout ways of saying things
In addition to my PR being a big edit, it is also on an important document. I have looked over my changes well and I know you will too. Reply if anything needs fixing/changing in the PR.
I have more changes that I want to add, but I figured I had edited the document enough already and if I added anythign else or made more extensive modifications it might be hard to tell what exactly I did.
I know this feels like a workaround for some misbehaving/missing UI, but it is better than the reference to the ML discussion, and it links to the open issue.
I have not done extensive testing to this method. I am sending the PR in a hurry because I have been frustrated (missing my compose-key) for some days after reinstalling, and I think this may prove useful for other users. Please try to reproduce and/or get some community feedback before accepting the PR; Also, feel free to reword, reformat, or discard :)
This proposed file changes probably includes some content changes, but ones I hope you'll immediately agree with because the result is a more accurate article.
Among other things,
* Removed unnecessarily prudent logical connection phrases like "thus," and just replaced them with "because" and "as a result" where I could.
* Moved some sentences or clarifications to their proper sections, e.g. moved the "Despite this rule, some acronyms..." line to the Avoid Acronyms section.
* Removed some sentences (like "Additionally, security focused software has the responsibility of providing safety to the user and their data") that, while true, without proper context did not seem relevant to the article.
* Removed some phrases that repeated known contextual information like "of usability and experience" in "if you are interested in furthering your understanding of usability and experience" or "which are shown to a user" in "notifications which are shown to a user".
* Introduced some clauses or phrases that clarified information, like adding "of those mentioned" to "All three desktop environments have their own human interface guidelines,"
* Merged the Avoid Repetitive Tasks and Minimize Repetitive Steps sections.
* Rewrote some sentences that were incomplete or didn't make sense into what I assumed the writer intended to say.
* Inserted possessive's' when they were necessary, and turned bigger sentences into smaller ones using possessives when I could ("notification messages presented to user" --> "user's notification messages")
* Grammar edits
* Compartmentalized run-on sentences.
This was a pretty big edit, so you'll probably disagree with some of the changes. Just explain what you want to be re-done or where my edits changes an important meaning/formed an inaccuracy and I will make another commit.
