Update monero-to-the-oscars.md

monero-to-the-oscars.md

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 ### How can we help?
 
 I self-funded the shoot and post-production (the budget was in the low six figures), which exhausted my personal savings. We need funds for the most crucial phase – the release of the film. This includes getting it in front of festivals and promoting it there, hiring a publicist, running an awards campaign. All this costs money and I am coming to the Monero community for help.
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-###### We are looking to raise 154 XMR (the equivalent of $25K at Kraken’s current 20-day EMA)
 
 ### What do we get in return?
-##### 1. Exposure
+##### 1. Exposure (the right kind)
 The film has the chance of reaching hundreds of thousands and even millions of people. Not every viewer will become a Monero user, but they will all be exposed to Monero in a positive way. The community will also receive an acknowledgement in the credits, to the effect of "this movie was kindly supported by the Monero community" with the Monero logo and getmonero.org underneath.
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-Monero already gets exposure in the media and <a href="https://twitter.com/vikrantnyc/status/1616152774856540166?s=20">even some TV shows</a>, but almost always as a Ransomcoin. This is a story that shows Monero being used in the way most of us use it -- as a savings vehicle that we can pass down to our loved ones.
+Monero already gets exposure in the media and <a href="https://twitter.com/vikrantnyc/status/1616152774856540166?s=20">even some TV shows</a>, but almost always as a Ransomcoin. This is a story that shows Monero being used in the way most of us use it -- as a savings vehicle that we can pass down to our loved ones outside of anyone else's control. Monero means money, but it also represents so much more -- a path towards personal freedom, away from coercion by the state or others. This is what the film tries to get across and hopefully it succeeds.
 
 ##### 2. Physical presence
 With the community's help and the right release strategy, the film will play at major festivals across the world. Anytime the film plays, this will be an opportunity for an impromptu Monero meetup. Screenings can be publicized in the community beforehand to attract local Monero fans throughout the world.
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 ##### 4. Some cool GIFs, of course.
 But you'll get them regardless, since the film is already made.
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+Also, the idea to have a private screening for the community at MoneroKon was floated, which I'd be open to doing if there is interest.
 
 <img src="https://repo.getmonero.org/markofdistinction_/ccs-proposals/-/raw/master/coin_squeeze.gif">
 
-### What's your Oscars strategy?
+### Alright, how much do you want? Spit it out.
 
-Films under 40 minutes are considered live action short films by the Academy of Motion Picture Arts and Sciences. This is the category we're aiming for. There are two ways for a film to qualify:
+###### We are looking to raise 154 XMR (the equivalent of $25K at Kraken’s current 20-day EMA)
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+### What's your Oscars strategy? (i.e. How are you going to spend it?)
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+Films under 40 minutes are considered live action short films by the Academy of Motion Picture Arts and Sciences. This is the category we're aiming for -- either for the 2024 or 2025 edition, depending on how quickly the film qualifies. There are two ways for a film to qualify:
 
 1. The film must win an award at one of the ~130 Academy Award-qualifying festivals throughout the world:
     https://www.oscars.org/sites/oscars/files/95aa_anim_short_festivals.pdf
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     "Was the idea of the friend chasing him to give the coin to him basically saying Monero represented an
     alternative path to a better life/better system instead of the darker one he chose? That's how I read its place
     in the story."
-##### midipoet said:
-    "you don't need me to tell you, but for what it's worth, the production value is extremely high" 
-    "it's pretty much feature length quality, as you were aiming for. what struck me most though was the quality
-    of the acting."
 ##### Vik Sharma said:
     "Really, really well made."
 ##### Doug from MoneroTalk said:
     "Captivating! Sunita and I loved it."
-##### Chamus said:
-    "Manuel's acting was fantastic! and so was Alfonso's. They're both great. Ps. You really managed to give it an authentic Mexican flavour"
-##### dsc said:
-    "shit man, those border patrol agents are assholes for making him drink that. that last scene had me on the edge of my seat!"
 ##### Johnny Mnemonic said:
-    "Awesome film, dude! The Monero coin inclusion was great… didn’t feel out of place or anything. 
+    "Awesome film! The Monero coin inclusion was great… 
     Touching story… I really feel for the kid at the end because he’s just trying to make things right with his grandfather.
     I also liked that you included real footage at the end… really makes you feel how real it is. "
+##### dsc said:
+    "shit man, those border patrol agents are assholes for making him drink that. that last scene had me on the edge of my seat!"
 
-An idea was floated that we could have a private screening for the community at MoneroKon, which I'd be open to doing if there is interest.
  
 ### What happens if Monero's price fluctuates in the meantime?
 The amount we're raising is denominated in XMR. Any fluctuations in fiat value are at our own risk.